Feedback and Visual Storytelling Diagram

Grahams Tutorial Feedback- In the girl’s mind or a flashback/actually happening?

Only slight reservation is where she sees ghosts. Wonder if it would be better if shown from her point of view, as she starts to realise that she is not the first victim. It is in her mind rather than a flashback of rabbit’s past. Emphasis is more on her realisation about what must have happened in the past. So it is from a slightly different perspective: a haunting realisation moment.

Appearance of the ghosts: a bit cartoony cliché.

Horror element. Doors opening and closing and driving her crazy. Need to know whether it is in her mind or whether it is actually happening. Are doors happening because she is in a panic or are they really happening as a way of taunting her?

So these two small points are about whether things are actually happening or whether they are in her head. Everything before and after that has a real pace to it.